Slow Saturday

[rolanni]

Spent most of the day in front of the computer, making changes in the first, roughly-one-third chunk of Mouse and Dragon. I combined the first two chapters into one, deleted a small scene, added details and grace notes throughout -- and of course it all went slower than I had planned. I'm about to move to the couch with the last twenty pages and go through them, which means that sometime by tomorrow mid-morning, I'll be all caught up to where I was a week ago, though with possibly less words on the meter.

Not that writing is linear, or anything.

Also, I think that I've almost figured out how to get through the next third of the story without stinting anyone. I'll have to spend some time on the couch with a pad and pen to make sure I haven't forgotten anything, but I'm pretty sure that what I have in mind will work out.

I may have forgotten to say that we finished watching Avatar on Thursday night. I see that the misstep that had bothered me earlier was not...exactly... a misstep, after all, and I forgive the writers. Though I enjoyed the series, and I'm glad to have seen it, I don't think that, for me, it's a keeper. Still -- thanks to robotech_master for the tip!
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Daav sat, one knee folded on the seat, his arm on the back of the bench, chin nestled in the crook of his elbow. The perfect study, Aelliana thought, of a man who very much did not want to answer the question that had just been put to him.

Comments

[libertata.livejournal.com]

..."chin nestled in the crook of his elbow"? The only way I can get my chin into the crook of my elbow is by reaching my arm over the opposite shoulder and basically putting myself in a headlock. Not that I can't picture Daav doing such a thing, if he wanted to avoid answering a question....

[rolanni.livejournal.com]

Really?

I can half turn in a chair, prop my crooked arm on the back and put my chin in the bend of the elbow.

Flexibility FTW!

[libertata.livejournal.com]

Let's see...*attempts the position*...nope. I can get my nose to my elbow, but not my chin. I am duly impressed.